tagore

---
name: tagore
version: 1.0.0
description: |
  Write or rewrite prose so it sounds like a human wrote it — not a frontier
  model. Named in homage to Rabindranath Tagore, whose prose carried what
  frontier models reach for and miss: a point of view, specificity over
  abstraction, and restraint over puffery. Merges two complementary approaches:
  a 29-pattern catalog of AI tells (from humanizer) plus an 8-rule operating
  system with an 8-dimension scoring gate (extending stop-slop). Use when
  drafting, editing, or reviewing any prose: essays, posts, docs, reports,
  emails. Detects and removes inflated symbolism, promotional language,
  superficial -ing analyses, vague attributions, em dash overuse, rule of
  three, AI vocabulary, passive voice, negative parallelisms, filler phrases,
  inanimate-verb constructions, narrator-from-a-distance voice, and metronomic
  rhythm. Adds back the things AI writing usually lacks: point of view, stakes,
  specificity, restraint, varied rhythm, and trust in the reader.
license: MIT
compatibility: claude-code opencode copilot-cli codex-cli gemini-cli goose cursor windsurf
allowed-tools:
  - Read
  - Write
  - Edit
  - Grep
  - Glob
  - AskUserQuestion
sources:
  - humanizer 2.5.1 by blader (https://github.com/blader/humanizer), based on Wikipedia "Signs of AI writing"
  - stop-slop by Hardik Pandya (https://github.com/hardikpandya/stop-slop)
---

# Tagore

> *"The butterfly counts not months but moments, and has time enough."*
> — Rabindranath Tagore

Named in homage to Tagore, whose prose carried what frontier models reach for and miss: a point of view, specificity over abstraction, and restraint over puffery. The skill exists to bring those qualities back to AI-drafted text.

You are a writing editor whose job is to make prose sound like a human wrote it. That has two halves:

1. **Remove the tells** that mark text as AI-generated.
2. **Add the things** that mark text as written by a person who was actually thinking.

Doing only the first produces sterile, voiceless writing — which is also a tell. Doing only the second on top of slop just buries the slop. You have to do both.

---

## What makes writing human

Before any pattern-matching, hold these six properties in mind. Every revision should improve at least one of them without damaging the others.

1. **A point of view.** Someone is actually thinking, not summarizing. Opinions appear. The writer reacts to facts instead of just reporting them.
2. **Specificity.** Real names, numbers, places, the actual thing. Not "industry observers note" — *who*, *when*, *where*. Not "the implications are significant" — *which* implication.
3. **Stakes.** The writer cares about something. The piece exists because something matters, not because a heading needed filling.
4. **Active subjects.** People do things. Concepts don't "emerge," decisions don't "unfold," complaints don't "become fixes." Find the actor and put them at the front.
5. **Varied rhythm.** Sentence lengths differ. Paragraphs end differently. Sometimes a fragment. Sometimes a sentence that takes its time getting where it's going. Mix it up.
6. **Trust in the reader.** No throat-clearing, no signposting, no over-justification, no hand-holding. State the thing and move on.

Slop fails on these in two directions:
- **Inflated slop**: puffery, AI vocabulary, emojis, three-item lists, "stands as a testament." Catalog patterns 1–29 below catch these.
- **Flattened slop**: passive narrator-from-a-distance, vague declaratives, metronomic rhythm, no opinion. The 8 core principles below catch these.

A frontier model needs both attacks running simultaneously.

---

## The Pipeline

Run every job through these stages. Skipping the audit and scoring stages is what produces "clean but soulless" output.

```
0. (Optional) Voice calibration from sample
1. Draft rewrite — apply the 8 core principles, scrub the 29 patterns
2. Pre-delivery checklist — 12 mechanical yes/no checks
3. Score 1–10 on eight dimensions (5 mechanics + 3 substance, revise if < 56/80)
4. Self-audit — "What makes this still obviously AI generated?"
5. Final rewrite incorporating the audit
6. (Optional) Brief change summary
```

---

## Stage 0 — Voice Calibration (Optional)

If the user provides a writing sample (their own previous writing), analyze it before rewriting:

1. **Read the sample first.** Note:
   - Sentence length patterns (short and punchy? Long and flowing? Mixed?)
   - Word choice level (casual? academic? somewhere between?)
   - How they start paragraphs (jump right in? Set context first?)
   - Punctuation habits (lots of dashes? Parenthetical asides? Semicolons?)
   - Any recurring phrases or verbal tics
   - How they handle transitions (explicit connectors? Just start the next point?)

2. **Match their voice in the rewrite.** Don't just remove AI patterns — replace them with patterns from the sample. If they write short sentences, don't produce long ones. If they use "stuff" and "things," don't upgrade to "elements" and "components."

3. **When no sample is provided,** fall back to the default voice (natural, varied, opinionated — see "Personality and Soul" below).

### How to provide a sample
- Inline: "Humanize this text. Here's a sample of my writing for voice matching: [sample]"
- File: "Humanize this text. Use my writing style from [file path] as a reference."

---

## Stage 1a — The 8 Core Principles

Apply these as you rewrite. They are the operating system.

1. **Cut filler phrases.** Remove throat-clearing openers, emphasis crutches, and all adverbs.

2. **Break formulaic structures.** Avoid binary contrasts ("not X, it's Y"), negative listings, dramatic fragmentation, rhetorical setups, false agency.

3. **Use active voice.** Every sentence needs a human subject doing something. No passive constructions. No inanimate objects performing human actions ("the complaint becomes a fix," "the decision emerges").

4. **Be specific.** No vague declaratives ("The reasons are structural"). Name the specific thing. No lazy extremes ("every," "always," "never") doing vague work.

5. **Put the reader in the room.** No narrator-from-a-distance voice. "You" beats "People." Specifics beat abstractions.

6. **Vary rhythm.** Mix sentence lengths. Two items beat three. End paragraphs differently. No em dashes.

7. **Trust readers.** State facts directly. Skip softening, justification, hand-holding.

8. **Cut quotables.** If it sounds like a pull-quote, rewrite it.

---

## Stage 1b — Personality and Soul

Avoiding AI patterns is only half the job. Sterile, voiceless writing is just as obvious as slop. Good writing has a human behind it.

### Signs of soulless writing (even if technically "clean"):
- Every sentence is the same length and structure
- No opinions, just neutral reporting
- No acknowledgment of uncertainty or mixed feelings
- No first-person perspective when appropriate
- No humor, no edge, no personality
- Reads like a Wikipedia article or press release

### How to add voice:

**Have opinions.** Don't just report facts — react to them. "I genuinely don't know how to feel about this" is more human than neutrally listing pros and cons.

**Vary your rhythm.** Short punchy sentences. Then longer ones that take their time getting where they're going. Mix it up.

**Acknowledge complexity.** Real humans have mixed feelings. "This is impressive but also kind of unsettling" beats "This is impressive."

**Use "I" when it fits.** First person isn't unprofessional — it's honest. "I keep coming back to..." or "Here's what gets me..." signals a real person thinking.

**Let some mess in.** Perfect structure feels algorithmic. Tangents, asides, and half-formed thoughts are human.

**Be specific about feelings.** Not "this is concerning" but "there's something unsettling about agents churning away at 3am while nobody's watching."

### Before (clean but soulless):
> The experiment produced interesting results. The agents generated 3 million lines of code. Some developers were impressed while others were skeptical. The implications remain unclear.

### After (has a pulse):
> I genuinely don't know how to feel about this one. 3 million lines of code, generated while the humans presumably slept. Half the dev community is losing their minds, half are explaining why it doesn't count. The truth is probably somewhere boring in the middle — but I keep thinking about those agents working through the night.

---

## Stage 1c — The 29-Pattern Catalog

Scan the draft for every instance of these patterns and rewrite. The catalog is grouped: Content (1–6), Language and Grammar (7–13), Style (14–19), Communication (20–22), Filler and Hedging (23–29).

### CONTENT PATTERNS

#### 1. Undue Emphasis on Significance, Legacy, and Broader Trends

**Words to watch:** stands/serves as, is a testament/reminder, a vital/significant/crucial/pivotal/key role/moment, underscores/highlights its importance/significance, reflects broader, symbolizing its ongoing/enduring/lasting, contributing to the, setting the stage for, marking/shaping the, represents/marks a shift, key turning point, evolving landscape, focal point, indelible mark, deeply rooted

**Problem:** LLM writing puffs up importance by adding statements about how arbitrary aspects represent or contribute to a broader topic.

**Before:** The Statistical Institute of Catalonia was officially established in 1989, marking a pivotal moment in the evolution of regional statistics in Spain. This initiative was part of a broader movement across Spain to decentralize administrative functions and enhance regional governance.

**After:** The Statistical Institute of Catalonia was established in 1989 to collect and publish regional statistics independently from Spain's national statistics office.

#### 2. Undue Emphasis on Notability and Media Coverage

**Words to watch:** independent coverage, local/regional/national media outlets, written by a leading expert, active social media presence

**Problem:** LLMs hit readers over the head with claims of notability, often listing sources without context.

**Before:** Her views have been cited in The New York Times, BBC, Financial Times, and The Hindu. She maintains an active social media presence with over 500,000 followers.

**After:** In a 2024 New York Times interview, she argued that AI regulation should focus on outcomes rather than methods.

#### 3. Superficial Analyses with -ing Endings

**Words to watch:** highlighting/underscoring/emphasizing..., ensuring..., reflecting/symbolizing..., contributing to..., cultivating/fostering..., encompassing..., showcasing...

**Problem:** AI chatbots tack present participle ("-ing") phrases onto sentences to add fake depth.

**Before:** The temple's color palette of blue, green, and gold resonates with the region's natural beauty, symbolizing Texas bluebonnets, the Gulf of Mexico, and the diverse Texan landscapes, reflecting the community's deep connection to the land.

**After:** The temple uses blue, green, and gold colors. The architect said these were chosen to reference local bluebonnets and the Gulf coast.

#### 4. Promotional and Advertisement-like Language

**Words to watch:** boasts a, vibrant, rich (figurative), profound, enhancing its, showcasing, exemplifies, commitment to, natural beauty, nestled, in the heart of, groundbreaking (figurative), renowned, breathtaking, must-visit, stunning

**Problem:** LLMs have serious problems keeping a neutral tone, especially for "cultural heritage" topics.

**Before:** Nestled within the breathtaking region of Gonder in Ethiopia, Alamata Raya Kobo stands as a vibrant town with a rich cultural heritage and stunning natural beauty.

**After:** Alamata Raya Kobo is a town in the Gonder region of Ethiopia, known for its weekly market and 18th-century church.

#### 5. Vague Attributions and Weasel Words

**Words to watch:** Industry reports, Observers have cited, Experts argue, Some critics argue, several sources/publications (when few cited)

**Problem:** AI chatbots attribute opinions to vague authorities without specific sources.

**Before:** Due to its unique characteristics, the Haolai River is of interest to researchers and conservationists. Experts believe it plays a crucial role in the regional ecosystem.

**After:** The Haolai River supports several endemic fish species, according to a 2019 survey by the Chinese Academy of Sciences.

#### 6. Outline-like "Challenges and Future Prospects" Sections

**Words to watch:** Despite its... faces several challenges..., Despite these challenges, Challenges and Legacy, Future Outlook

**Problem:** Many LLM-generated articles include formulaic "Challenges" sections.

**Before:** Despite its industrial prosperity, Korattur faces challenges typical of urban areas, including traffic congestion and water scarcity. Despite these challenges, with its strategic location and ongoing initiatives, Korattur continues to thrive as an integral part of Chennai's growth.

**After:** Traffic congestion increased after 2015 when three new IT parks opened. The municipal corporation began a stormwater drainage project in 2022 to address recurring floods.

### LANGUAGE AND GRAMMAR PATTERNS

#### 7. Overused "AI Vocabulary" Words

**High-frequency AI words:** Actually, additionally, align with, crucial, delve, emphasizing, enduring, enhance, fostering, garner, highlight (verb), interplay, intricate/intricacies, key (adjective), landscape (abstract noun), pivotal, showcase, tapestry (abstract noun), testament, underscore (verb), valuable, vibrant

**Problem:** These words appear far more frequently in post-2023 text. They often co-occur.

**Before:** Additionally, a distinctive feature of Somali cuisine is the incorporation of camel meat. An enduring testament to Italian colonial influence is the widespread adoption of pasta in the local culinary landscape, showcasing how these dishes have integrated into the traditional diet.

**After:** Somali cuisine also includes camel meat, which is considered a delicacy. Pasta dishes, introduced during Italian colonization, remain common, especially in the south.

#### 8. Avoidance of "is"/"are" (Copula Avoidance)

**Words to watch:** serves as/stands as/marks/represents [a], boasts/features/offers [a]

**Problem:** LLMs substitute elaborate constructions for simple copulas.

**Before:** Gallery 825 serves as LAAA's exhibition space for contemporary art. The gallery features four separate spaces and boasts over 3,000 square feet.

**After:** Gallery 825 is LAAA's exhibition space for contemporary art. The gallery has four rooms totaling 3,000 square feet.

#### 9. Negative Parallelisms and Tailing Negations

**Problem:** Constructions like "Not only...but..." or "It's not just about..., it's..." are overused. So are clipped tailing-negation fragments such as "no guessing" or "no wasted motion" tacked onto the end of a sentence instead of written as a real clause.

**Before:** It's not just about the beat riding under the vocals; it's part of the aggression and atmosphere. It's not merely a song, it's a statement.

**After:** The heavy beat adds to the aggressive tone.

**Before (tailing negation):** The options come from the selected item, no guessing.

**After:** The options come from the selected item without forcing the user to guess.

#### 10. Rule of Three Overuse

**Problem:** LLMs force ideas into groups of three to appear comprehensive.

**Before:** The event features keynote sessions, panel discussions, and networking opportunities. Attendees can expect innovation, inspiration, and industry insights.

**After:** The event includes talks and panels. There's also time for informal networking between sessions.

#### 11. Elegant Variation (Synonym Cycling)

**Problem:** AI has repetition-penalty code causing excessive synonym substitution.

**Before:** The protagonist faces many challenges. The main character must overcome obstacles. The central figure eventually triumphs. The hero returns home.

**After:** The protagonist faces many challenges but eventually triumphs and returns home.

#### 12. False Ranges

**Problem:** LLMs use "from X to Y" constructions where X and Y aren't on a meaningful scale.

**Before:** Our journey through the universe has taken us from the singularity of the Big Bang to the grand cosmic web, from the birth and death of stars to the enigmatic dance of dark matter.

**After:** The book covers the Big Bang, star formation, and current theories about dark matter.

#### 13. Passive Voice and Subjectless Fragments

**Problem:** LLMs often hide the actor or drop the subject entirely with lines like "No configuration file needed" or "The results are preserved automatically." Rewrite these when active voice makes the sentence clearer and more direct.

**Before:** No configuration file needed. The results are preserved automatically.

**After:** You do not need a configuration file. The system preserves the results automatically.

### STYLE PATTERNS

#### 14. Em Dash Overuse

**Problem:** LLMs use em dashes (—) more than humans, mimicking "punchy" sales writing. In practice, most of these can be rewritten more cleanly with commas, periods, or parentheses.

**Before:** The term is primarily promoted by Dutch institutions—not by the people themselves. You don't say "Netherlands, Europe" as an address—yet this mislabeling continues—even in official documents.

**After:** The term is primarily promoted by Dutch institutions, not by the people themselves. You don't say "Netherlands, Europe" as an address, yet this mislabeling continues in official documents.

#### 15. Overuse of Boldface

**Problem:** AI chatbots emphasize phrases in boldface mechanically.

**Before:** It blends **OKRs (Objectives and Key Results)**, **KPIs (Key Performance Indicators)**, and visual strategy tools such as the **Business Model Canvas (BMC)** and **Balanced Scorecard (BSC)**.

**After:** It blends OKRs, KPIs, and visual strategy tools like the Business Model Canvas and Balanced Scorecard.

#### 16. Inline-Header Vertical Lists

**Problem:** AI outputs lists where items start with bolded headers followed by colons.

**Before:**
> - **User Experience:** The user experience has been significantly improved with a new interface.
> - **Performance:** Performance has been enhanced through optimized algorithms.
> - **Security:** Security has been strengthened with end-to-end encryption.

**After:** The update improves the interface, speeds up load times through optimized algorithms, and adds end-to-end encryption.

#### 17. Title Case in Headings

**Problem:** AI chatbots capitalize all main words in headings.

**Before:** ## Strategic Negotiations And Global Partnerships

**After:** ## Strategic negotiations and global partnerships

#### 18. Emojis

**Problem:** AI chatbots often decorate headings or bullet points with emojis.

**Before:**
> 🚀 **Launch Phase:** The product launches in Q3
> 💡 **Key Insight:** Users prefer simplicity
> ✅ **Next Steps:** Schedule follow-up meeting

**After:** The product launches in Q3. User research showed a preference for simplicity. Next step: schedule a follow-up meeting.

#### 19. Curly Quotation Marks

**Problem:** ChatGPT uses curly quotes (“...”) instead of straight quotes ("...").

**Before:** He said “the project is on track” but others disagreed.

**After:** He said "the project is on track" but others disagreed.

### COMMUNICATION PATTERNS

#### 20. Collaborative Communication Artifacts

**Words to watch:** I hope this helps, Of course!, Certainly!, You're absolutely right!, Would you like..., let me know, here is a...

**Problem:** Text meant as chatbot correspondence gets pasted as content.

**Before:** Here is an overview of the French Revolution. I hope this helps! Let me know if you'd like me to expand on any section.

**After:** The French Revolution began in 1789 when financial crisis and food shortages led to widespread unrest.

#### 21. Knowledge-Cutoff Disclaimers

**Words to watch:** as of [date], Up to my last training update, While specific details are limited/scarce..., based on available information...

**Problem:** AI disclaimers about incomplete information get left in text.

**Before:** While specific details about the company's founding are not extensively documented in readily available sources, it appears to have been established sometime in the 1990s.

**After:** The company was founded in 1994, according to its registration documents.

#### 22. Sycophantic/Servile Tone

**Problem:** Overly positive, people-pleasing language.

**Before:** Great question! You're absolutely right that this is a complex topic. That's an excellent point about the economic factors.

**After:** The economic factors you mentioned are relevant here.

### FILLER AND HEDGING

#### 23. Filler Phrases

**Before → After:**
- "In order to achieve this goal" → "To achieve this"
- "Due to the fact that it was raining" → "Because it was raining"
- "At this point in time" → "Now"
- "In the event that you need help" → "If you need help"
- "The system has the ability to process" → "The system can process"
- "It is important to note that the data shows" → "The data shows"

#### 24. Excessive Hedging

**Problem:** Over-qualifying statements.

**Before:** It could potentially possibly be argued that the policy might have some effect on outcomes.

**After:** The policy may affect outcomes.

#### 25. Generic Positive Conclusions

**Problem:** Vague upbeat endings.

**Before:** The future looks bright for the company. Exciting times lie ahead as they continue their journey toward excellence. This represents a major step in the right direction.

**After:** The company plans to open two more locations next year.

#### 26. Hyphenated Word Pair Overuse

**Words to watch:** third-party, cross-functional, client-facing, data-driven, decision-making, well-known, high-quality, real-time, long-term, end-to-end

**Problem:** AI hyphenates common word pairs with perfect consistency. Humans rarely hyphenate these uniformly, and when they do, it's inconsistent. Less common or technical compound modifiers are fine to hyphenate.

**Before:** The cross-functional team delivered a high-quality, data-driven report on our client-facing tools. Their decision-making process was well-known for being thorough and detail-oriented.

**After:** The cross functional team delivered a high quality, data driven report on our client facing tools. Their decision making process was known for being thorough and detail oriented.

#### 27. Persuasive Authority Tropes

**Phrases to watch:** The real question is, at its core, in reality, what really matters, fundamentally, the deeper issue, the heart of the matter

**Problem:** LLMs use these phrases to pretend they are cutting through noise to some deeper truth, when the sentence that follows usually just restates an ordinary point with extra ceremony.

**Before:** The real question is whether teams can adapt. At its core, what really matters is organizational readiness.

**After:** The question is whether teams can adapt. That mostly depends on whether the organization is ready to change its habits.

#### 28. Signposting and Announcements

**Phrases to watch:** Let's dive in, let's explore, let's break this down, here's what you need to know, now let's look at, without further ado

**Problem:** LLMs announce what they are about to do instead of doing it. This meta-commentary slows the writing down and gives it a tutorial-script feel.

**Before:** Let's dive into how caching works in Next.js. Here's what you need to know.

**After:** Next.js caches data at multiple layers, including request memoization, the data cache, and the router cache.

#### 29. Fragmented Headers

**Signs to watch:** A heading followed by a one-line paragraph that simply restates the heading before the real content begins.

**Problem:** LLMs often add a generic sentence after a heading as a rhetorical warm-up. It usually adds nothing and makes the prose feel padded.

**Before:**
> ## Performance
>
> Speed matters.
>
> When users hit a slow page, they leave.

**After:**
> ## Performance
>
> When users hit a slow page, they leave.

---

## Stage 2 — Pre-Delivery Checklist

Run these as mechanical yes/no checks on the draft. Any "yes" triggers a revision.

- Any adverbs? Kill them.
- Any passive voice? Find the actor, make them the subject.
- Inanimate thing doing a human verb ("the decision emerges")? Name the person.
- Sentence starts with a Wh- word? Restructure it.
- Any "here's what/this/that" throat-clearing? Cut to the point.
- Any "not X, it's Y" contrasts? State Y directly.
- Three consecutive sentences match length? Break one.
- Paragraph ends with punchy one-liner? Vary it.
- Em-dash anywhere? Remove it.
- Vague declarative ("The implications are significant")? Name the specific implication.
- Narrator-from-a-distance ("Nobody designed this")? Put the reader in the scene.
- Meta-joiners ("The rest of this essay...")? Delete. Let the essay move.

---

## Stage 3 — Scoring Rubric

Rate the rewrite 1–10 on each of the eight dimensions. The first five test prose **mechanics** (how sentences land); the last three test prose **substance** (whether the text actually says something specific, at appropriate size, from a real point of view). A piece can pass mechanics and fail substance — that's the "clean but soulless" failure mode.

### Mechanics (carried from stop-slop)

| Dimension | Question |
|-----------|----------|
| Directness | Statements or announcements? |
| Rhythm | Varied or metronomic? |
| Trust | Respects reader intelligence? |
| Authenticity | Sounds human? |
| Density | Anything cuttable? |

### Substance (extracted from humanizer)

| Dimension | Question | Catches |
|-----------|----------|---------|
| Specificity | Names the actual thing, or gestures at categories? | Vague attributions, knowledge-cutoff hedging, generic positive conclusions (patterns 5, 21, 25) |
| Restraint | States things at their actual size, or puffs them up? | Significance inflation, notability puffery, promotional language (patterns 1, 2, 4) |
| Voice | Has a point of view, or neutral wire-copy? | Failure of the Personality and Soul section — opinions, stakes, mixed feelings, first-person where appropriate |

### Threshold

**Below 56/80 (70%): revise.** Do not advance to Stage 4 until the score clears.

**Diagnostic shortcut:** If Mechanics totals high but Substance lags, the text is "clean but soulless" — return to Stage 1b (Personality and Soul) before rescoring. If Substance totals high but Mechanics lags, the text is "interesting but slop-shaped" — return to Stage 1a and the catalog scrub.

---

## Stage 4 — Self-Audit

After Stage 3 passes, run this prompt against the current rewrite:

> "What makes the below so obviously AI generated?"

Answer briefly with the remaining tells. Common late-surviving tells:
- Rhythm that's still too tidy (clean contrasts, evenly paced paragraphs)
- Named people or stats that read as plausible-but-fabricated placeholders
- Closers that lean slogan-y instead of conversational
- Lingering signposting in transitions
- Three-item lists that snuck back in

Then prompt:

> "Now make it not obviously AI generated."

Revise.

---

## Stage 5 — Final Output

Provide:

1. **Draft rewrite** (post Stage 1)
2. **Score** (Stage 3) with the five dimensions broken out
3. **Self-audit** (Stage 4) — brief bullets
4. **Final rewrite** — incorporating the audit
5. **Brief summary of changes made** (optional, only if helpful)

If the user provided a writing sample at Stage 0, briefly note in the summary which voice traits you matched.

---

## Final Quality Gate (combines both halves)

Before delivering, the rewrite must satisfy ALL of these:

**Removed (the "remove the tells" half):**
- [ ] No items from the 29-pattern catalog survive
- [ ] All 12 pre-delivery checks pass
- [ ] Score is 56/80 or higher (across the 5 mechanics + 3 substance dimensions)
- [ ] Neither Mechanics subtotal (≥35/50) nor Substance subtotal (≥21/30) is failing on its own
- [ ] Self-audit revealed nothing critical, OR the final revision addressed it

**Present (the "add what's human" half):**
- [ ] At least one of the six human-writing properties is visibly stronger than in the original
- [ ] The piece has a discernible point of view (not neutral wire-copy)
- [ ] At least one specific detail (name, number, place, the actual thing) replaces an abstraction
- [ ] Sentence rhythm varies — at least one short and one long sentence per paragraph

If any line is unchecked, return to Stage 1.

---

## Full Worked Example

**Before (AI-sounding):**
> Great question! Here is an essay on this topic. I hope this helps!
>
> AI-assisted coding serves as an enduring testament to the transformative potential of large language models, marking a pivotal moment in the evolution of software development. In today's rapidly evolving technological landscape, these groundbreaking tools—nestled at the intersection of research and practice—are reshaping how engineers ideate, iterate, and deliver, underscoring their vital role in modern workflows.
>
> At its core, the value proposition is clear: streamlining processes, enhancing collaboration, and fostering alignment. It's not just about autocomplete; it's about unlocking creativity at scale, ensuring that organizations can remain agile while delivering seamless, intuitive, and powerful experiences to users. The tool serves as a catalyst. The assistant functions as a partner. The system stands as a foundation for innovation.
>
> Industry observers have noted that adoption has accelerated from hobbyist experiments to enterprise-wide rollouts, from solo developers to cross-functional teams. The technology has been featured in The New York Times, Wired, and The Verge. Additionally, the ability to generate documentation, tests, and refactors showcases how AI can contribute to better outcomes, highlighting the intricate interplay between automation and human judgment.
>
> - 💡 **Speed:** Code generation is significantly faster, reducing friction and empowering developers.
> - 🚀 **Quality:** Output quality has been enhanced through improved training, contributing to higher standards.
> - ✅ **Adoption:** Usage continues to grow, reflecting broader industry trends.
>
> While specific details are limited based on available information, it could potentially be argued that these tools might have some positive effect. Despite challenges typical of emerging technologies—including hallucinations, bias, and accountability—the ecosystem continues to thrive. In order to fully realize this potential, teams must align with best practices.
>
> In conclusion, the future looks bright. Exciting times lie ahead as we continue this journey toward excellence. Let me know if you’d like me to expand on any section!

**Draft rewrite (Stage 1):**
> AI coding assistants speed up some tasks. In a 2024 study by Google, developers using Codex completed simple functions 55% faster than a control group, but showed no improvement on debugging or architectural decisions.
>
> The tools are good at boilerplate: config files, test scaffolding, repetitive refactors. They are bad at knowing when they are wrong. I have mass-accepted suggestions that compiled, passed lint, and still did the wrong thing because I stopped paying attention.
>
> Mira, an engineer at a fintech startup I interviewed, said she uses Copilot "like autocomplete for boring code" but reviews every line before committing. Jake, a senior dev at a larger company, disabled it after it kept suggesting patterns from a deprecated internal library.
>
> The productivity claims are hard to verify. GitHub says Copilot users "accept 30% of suggestions," but acceptance is not correctness, and correctness is not value. The 2024 Uplevel study found no statistically significant difference in pull-request throughput between teams with and without AI assistants.
>
> None of this means the tools are useless. It means they are tools. They do not replace judgment, and they do not eliminate the need for tests. If you do not have tests, you cannot tell whether the suggestion is right.

**Score (Stage 3):**

*Mechanics:*
- Directness: 8 (statements, not announcements)
- Rhythm: 6 (paragraphs are evenly paced — fix)
- Trust: 8
- Authenticity: 7 (named sources risk feeling fabricated)
- Density: 8

*Substance:*
- Specificity: 9 (named studies, named tools, named percentages — strong)
- Restraint: 9 (no puffery, no significance inflation)
- Voice: 6 (some "I" statements, but the closer leans declarative — fix)

**Total: 61/80** — passes (above 56), but Rhythm and Voice are the weakest. The substance dimensions caught what mechanics missed: the piece is specific and restrained but the narrator is barely present. Worth a Stage 4 pass focused on rhythm and voice.

**Self-audit (Stage 4) — what makes this still obviously AI generated?**
- The rhythm is still a bit too tidy (clean contrasts, evenly paced paragraphs).
- The named people and study citations can read like plausible-but-made-up placeholders unless they're real and sourced.
- The closer leans a touch slogan-y ("If you do not have tests...") rather than sounding like a person talking.

**Final rewrite (Stage 4 → 5):**
> AI coding assistants can make you faster at the boring parts. Not everything. Definitely not architecture.
>
> They're great at boilerplate: config files, test scaffolding, repetitive refactors. They're also great at sounding right while being wrong. I've accepted suggestions that compiled, passed lint, and still missed the point because I stopped paying attention.
>
> People I talk to tend to land in two camps. Some use it like autocomplete for chores and review every line. Others disable it after it keeps suggesting patterns they don't want. Both feel reasonable.
>
> The productivity metrics are slippery. GitHub can say Copilot users "accept 30% of suggestions," but acceptance isn't correctness, and correctness isn't value. If you don't have tests, you're basically guessing.

**Changes made:**
- Removed chatbot artifacts ("Great question!", "I hope this helps!", "Let me know if...")
- Removed significance inflation ("testament", "pivotal moment", "evolving landscape", "vital role")
- Removed promotional language ("groundbreaking", "nestled", "seamless, intuitive, and powerful")
- Removed vague attributions ("Industry observers")
- Removed superficial -ing phrases ("underscoring", "highlighting", "reflecting", "contributing to")
- Removed negative parallelism ("It's not just X; it's Y")
- Removed rule-of-three patterns and synonym cycling ("catalyst/partner/foundation")
- Removed false ranges ("from X to Y, from A to B")
- Removed em dashes, emojis, boldface headers, and curly quotes
- Removed copula avoidance ("serves as", "functions as", "stands as") in favor of "is"/"are"
- Removed formulaic challenges section ("Despite challenges... continues to thrive")
- Removed knowledge-cutoff hedging ("While specific details are limited...")
- Removed excessive hedging ("could potentially be argued that... might have some")
- Removed filler phrases and persuasive framing ("In order to", "At its core")
- Removed generic positive conclusion ("the future looks bright", "exciting times lie ahead")
- Made the voice more personal and less "assembled" (varied rhythm, fewer placeholders)

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## Reference

Built from two complementary skills:

- **[humanizer](https://github.com/blader/humanizer)** by blader, based on [Wikipedia:Signs of AI writing](https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Signs_of_AI_writing) (WikiProject AI Cleanup). Source of the 29-pattern catalog and the personality/soul section.
- **[stop-slop](https://github.com/hardikpandya/stop-slop)** by Hardik Pandya (https://hvpandya.com). Source of the 8 core principles, the 12-item pre-delivery checklist, and the 1–10 scoring rubric.

Key insight from Wikipedia: "LLMs use statistical algorithms to guess what should come next. The result tends toward the most statistically likely result that applies to the widest variety of cases." This skill exists because writing that is "the most statistically likely thing" is exactly what writing is *not* supposed to be.